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2. Во многих странах студентов выгоняют из школ за плохое поведение и не разрешают им вернуться. Обсудите обе точки зрения на эту тему и дайте свое мнение.
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Tuition is very important nowadays when the world experiences the boom of knowledge based economy. Hovewer, whereas the most of the people understand how important the sdudying is, there are some people who bahave bad, do not attend lectures as expected, neglect passing exams on time and breaks the school discipline in any other ways. In many countries such people are expelled without possibility to return. Is it good or bad?
On one hand, such a strict punishment seems to be quite reasonable, espessialy when we talk about education financed by state. Why should moneys of taxpayers be spent on hooligans? Why should we treat law-beakers mildly? It is simply unfair to law-obeying people. Besides, as it is said, one bad sheep can spoil the whole herd if not separated timely.
On the other hand, expelling can produce a social tense and have a bad effect on society in a perspective. If expelled students are not able to return or to continue their education in another place, they probably will not get a qualification enough to get a job. Consequently, if they do not find a proper job they will probably come to some crime such as peddling drugs or commiting robberies and thefts. If so, the results of severe punishment will be too lamentable. The cure will be worse than disease.
In conclusion, I would like to express my own point of view on the issue. I'm personally inclined to acept expelling as a possible solution in espesially difficult cases. But this kind of penalty should be used very carefully when all other means were tested and did not work.
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Tuition is very important nowadays when the world experiences the boom of knowledge based economy. Hovewer, whereas the most of the people understand how important the sdudying is, there are some people who bahave bad, do not attend lectures as expected, neglect passing exams on time and breaks the school discipline in any other ways. In many countries such people are expelled without possibility to return. Is it good or bad?
On one hand, such a strict punishment seems to be quite reasonable, espessialy when we talk about education financed by state. Why should moneys of taxpayers be spent on hooligans? Why should we treat law-beakers mildly? It is simply unfair to law-obeying people. Besides, as it is said, one bad sheep can spoil the whole herd if not separated timely.
On the other hand, expelling can produce a social tense and have a bad effect on society in a perspective. If expelled students are not able to return or to continue their education in another place, they probably will not get a qualification enough to get a job. Consequently, if they do not find a proper job they will probably come to some crime such as peddling drugs or commiting robberies and thefts. If so, the results of severe punishment will be too lamentable. The cure will be worse than disease.
In conclusion, I would like to express my own point of view on the issue. I'm personally inclined to acept expelling as a possible solution in espesially difficult cases. But this kind of penalty should be used very carefully when all other means were tested and did not work.
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~265 words, 42 minutes
the most of the - не уверен people understand how important the sdudying is, there are some people who bahave bad, do not attend lectures as expected, neglect passing exams on time and break - без s the school discipline in any other ways. In many countries such people are expelled without possibility to return. Is it good or bad?
я уже отучился писать так, чтобы по ходу дела не исправлять, не дописывать и не переставлять блоки текста местами -- чувствую из-за этого райтинг будет для меня ОГРОМНОЙ проблемой 
Три главных совета: 1) следите за структурой- лучше два простых, но грамотно построенных предложения, чем одно замороченное, 2) старайтесь избегать вопросов - не любят они этого, попробуйте сказать то же самое в утвердительном предложении, 3) используйте слова попроще, но проверяйте ВСЕ на spelling - хотя я понимаю, некоторые Ваши ошибки могут быть просто опечатками, а "в ручную" вы бы написали правильно. А ваааще - удачи, она нам всем нужна!! 
Мои комментарии больше относятся к требованиям по написанию эссе в австралийских юни, я думаю они схожи в требованиями к академик модулю, т.к. 99% сдают его, чтобы в юни поступить...
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