'Поиграемся' в эссе еще раз?

[Maimiti_Isabella]

У меня есть неделя для 'игр'. Потом буду занята. Если есть интерес и желающие, можно еще раз 'поиграться', на тех же условиях. Но теперь уже на английском.

[Flak]

Maimiti_Isabella, простите, может я что-то пропустила, но о какой игре речь идёт?

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Maimiti_Isabella, простите, может я что-то пропустила, но о какой игре речь идёт?

Отсюда и дальше: http://www.gday.ru/forum/ielts/45491...ml#post4247321

[Rus_R]

Я за!

[NK999]

Тоже хочу поучаствовать!

[NortT]

И я тоже хочу

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Тогда как и в прошлый раз даю тему с заданием IELTS, но сама тема будет сформулирована по другому, чтобы не 'сбивать' с толку.

Напоминаю, что цель данной 'игры' - учиться отвечать на вопрос.

Failure to curb world population growth will have dire consequences. To what extent do you agree?


Пишем Introduction in the note form only, как и раньше.

[NortT]

Можно я попробую?
Intro:
I strongly agree that the growth of population could affect people's lives. An analysis of problems linked to the growing number of people such as starvation as well as huge amount of houshold waste will prove my position.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Можно я попробую?
Intro:
I strongly agree that the growth of population could affect people's lives. An analysis of problems linked to the growing number of people such as starvation as well as huge amount of houshold waste will prove my position.

Это самая последняя часть Intro. Я же прошу все Intro в note form

[Porosenok_aust]

World population is growing drammatically beside many attempts to stop it. Some argue that overpopulation will cause a lot of problems fot the planet and society. I strongly agree with it.

[NortT]

Over the past few decades the number of people has increased dramatically. It is sometimes argued that this trend is a positive development, however, I believe that the growth of the population could affect people's lives. An analysis of problems linked to the overpopulation such as starvation as well as a huge amount of houshold waste will prove my position.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

World population is growing drammatically beside many attempts to stop it. Some argue that overpopulation will cause a lot of problems for the planet and society. I strongly agree with it.

Идя хороша, но исполнение с точки зрения английского не очень.
beside vs. despite
a lot of - too informal
it vs this.

[Rus_R]

Overpopulation has become a serious problem that threatens human's well-being. World community put in great efforts to resolve the issue, but it has little success. I completely agree that failure to overcome the problem will result in serious consequences for the people and environment.

[MariaAn]

я тоже хочу. *после перерыва в подготовке*

Undoubtedly, the population of the Earth is growing from year to year.
However the natural resources and lands which is suitable for human living are strongly limited. Thus all of us will face with a difficult consequences at the nearest future which will be mentioned in this essay.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Overpopulation has become a serious problem that threatens human's well-being. World community put in great efforts to resolve the issue, but it has little success. I completely agree that failure to overcome the problem will result in serious consequences for the people and environment.

ОК. Все логично, но что такое the World community?

и слово в 'копилку' - mankind