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Тренирую writing - написание сочинения.
Прошу поругать похвалить, при этом хочу заметить, что
1. Читал все доступные материлы о мто как писать сочинения - просто пока нет практики
2. Также скачал и использовал при написании книку "Writing Proficienty"
Тема: Во многих странах запрещено содержание домашних животных в квартире. Правильно это или нет?
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Even though, human beings have kept pets since ancient centuries, nowadays, in some countries, it s forbidden to have a pet in urban flat.
One main advantage of keeping pets is that the most popular pet – dog- can protect your home from burglars, and in some criminal suburbs it is only way to save you house.
The other reason of allowing keeping animals at home is the fact, that most of the older people have nobody to talk with, except their pets. Scientists agree that cats can normalize blood pressure and decrease probability of heart attack.
Although pets can be very useful in some reasons, it can not be denied that animals do not understand rules of our society and they can disturb neighbors by, for example, barking or yelling during the night. Some sorts of parrots have habit to sing at the early morning, and there is no way to make them stop singing.
A further common criticism of keeping pets is the fact that there are a lot of accidents, when big dog bite innocent people and even children. The cause of those accidents is that dog owners do not use dog-leads on order to protect other people.
On the whole, it can be concluded that pets could be good helpers, but they are not human beings and sometimes they can be very annoying and even deadly dangerous. Anyway, I am sure that it is not necessary to ban keeping pet, we just need special rules describe responsibility of the pet owners, and regulate animal behaviors.
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Заранее спасибо!
Тренирую writing - написание сочинения.
Прошу поругать похвалить, при этом хочу заметить, что
1. Читал все доступные материлы о мто как писать сочинения - просто пока нет практики
2. Также скачал и использовал при написании книку "Writing Proficienty"
Тема: Во многих странах запрещено содержание домашних животных в квартире. Правильно это или нет?
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Even though, human beings have kept pets since ancient centuries, nowadays, in some countries, it s forbidden to have a pet in urban flat.
One main advantage of keeping pets is that the most popular pet – dog- can protect your home from burglars, and in some criminal suburbs it is only way to save you house.
The other reason of allowing keeping animals at home is the fact, that most of the older people have nobody to talk with, except their pets. Scientists agree that cats can normalize blood pressure and decrease probability of heart attack.
Although pets can be very useful in some reasons, it can not be denied that animals do not understand rules of our society and they can disturb neighbors by, for example, barking or yelling during the night. Some sorts of parrots have habit to sing at the early morning, and there is no way to make them stop singing.
A further common criticism of keeping pets is the fact that there are a lot of accidents, when big dog bite innocent people and even children. The cause of those accidents is that dog owners do not use dog-leads on order to protect other people.
On the whole, it can be concluded that pets could be good helpers, but they are not human beings and sometimes they can be very annoying and even deadly dangerous. Anyway, I am sure that it is not necessary to ban keeping pet, we just need special rules describe responsibility of the pet owners, and regulate animal behaviors.
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Заранее спасибо!
'big dog bite' -> big dog bites
Избегайте whould если нет conditional. Ну и постарайтесь немног из граматики ввернуть, тот же conditional... Проще, все проще. В этом плане очень помогает книга для подготовки к ТОЭФЛ - ну да это лично мое мнение, как, впрочем, и все вышеизложенное. .gif "Wink")
Perhaps, you need something else to correctly express you point. Otherwise, it looks like you haven't got words enough to give the clear explanation.
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