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Сообщение от Elena_S Посмотреть сообщениеПодскажите, пожалуйста, при описании графиков нужно обязательно писать conclusion?____________
Сообщение от bolo83всезнающая дама предпенсионного возраста, которая сама непонятно как попала в Австралию
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Привет! Вот и я дозрела до написания essey. Моя первая работа. Посмотрите. Убила несколько часов. Прошу кидать камни чтобы потом при пересчитывании шишек новое essey писалось лучше.
University should give same amount of money to their sport activities as they give to their library. Do you agree or disagree?
With many concerns such as fatness, illness, pernicious habits, pollution a public notice, drawn attention to live a healthy lifestyle and a lot of people think that educational institutions should to put more emphasis on physical activity students. However higher educational establishments put up money for gyms, gymnasiums and other sporting events in a less degree than for learning resource centers. In this essay I will consider some of the arguments for and against equal investing for sport and library.
It is no secret that healthy of society depend upon the younger generation. Now a lot of young people think only about their career and they forget about their healthy. A sport, athletics games, cultural and sports events help improve healthy pupils and students. Therefore many people think that the education system should pay more attention to this issue. For this reason the institutions of higher education must expands not only mind of students but physically activity of them and invest the necessary amount of money for sports development.
However a man or a woman which have success in a sport are learning underachieve because a professional sport is requiring certain physical abilities and much time. Some time they must decide between a study and a sport. The first exercise of alma mater is education younger people and only second is their sports of live. For this reason investment of universities in the sport or the athenaeum should be proportionate to the problem of education.
I am inclined to believe that the universities should sponsor the library better then the sport but at the same time they should take care of healthy lifestyle of students.
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Сообщение от Stacia Посмотреть сообщениеПривет! Вот и я дозрела до написания essey. Моя первая работа. Посмотрите. Убила несколько часов. Прошу кидать камни чтобы потом при пересчитывании шишек новое essey писалось лучше.
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Сообщение от bolo83всезнающая дама предпенсионного возраста, которая сама непонятно как попала в Австралию
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Друзья, гляньте на мое эссе. Писала часа 1.5, совсем не могу придумывать support sentences. Что делать?
Young people are encouraged to travel or work for one year after high school and before university studies. Do you think is it a good idea to do so?
Nowadays, it becomes popular among young people to have a gap year, which is widely supported by parents and society. The students usually take this year for travelling or getting work experience. In my opinion, it is a good idea in order to become more experienced.
To begin with, having a gap year is a great opportunity for getting life experience. For instance, while people travel around the world, they learn more about other cultures and customs, meet new people, speak other languages. All this can change their position in life and help to understand what they want.
Moreover, it helps to become self-reliant. Travelling or working, young people meet the situations when they need to make decisions by themselves. As a rule due to this youth become adult and learn to manage their lifes.
Nevertheless, some people argue that having a gap year is a bad idea. They alleged that education should be continuing. When the students have a such long break in their study, they miss time, which is expected to be spent on education. As a result their peers might have some advantages over them.
To sum up, I do believe that taking a gap year is a great idea, which gives the students a chance to become more independent and get useful experience, that hepl them to make their own choice in life.
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Сообщение от Maimiti_Isabella Посмотреть сообщениеЕсли требуется результат выше 5-ки, то непосредственно к подготовке к IELTS приступать еще рано: англииский на уровне самого начала Pre-Inter.
А IELTS мне еще рано сдавать. Я это вполне понимаю. Просто подумала, что начинать учиться писать все равно надо. Почему бы не объединить приятное с полезным? С инета накачала тем к ессе больше 200 и писем около 100. Если по одному в день на год хватит. К тому времени и до экзамена дозрею. Или вы считаете что надо начинать учиться писать с простых топиков?
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Сообщение от Stacia Посмотреть сообщениеИли вы считаете что надо начинать учиться писать с простых топиков?
интересно что так выдает невысокий уровень английского?____________
Сообщение от bolo83всезнающая дама предпенсионного возраста, которая сама непонятно как попала в Австралию
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Сообщение от Sade Посмотреть сообщениеДрузья, гляньте на мое эссе. Писала часа 1.5, совсем не могу придумывать support sentences. Что делать?
Young people are encouraged to travel or work for one year after high school and before university studies. Do you think is it a good idea to do so?
Nowadays, it becomes popular among young people to have a gap year, which is widely supported by parents and society. The students usually take this year for travelling or getting work experience. In my opinion, it is a good idea in order to become more experienced.
To begin with, having a gap year is a great opportunity for getting life experience. For instance, while people travel around the world, they learn more about other cultures and customs, meet new people, speak other languages. All this can change their position in life and help to understand what they want.
Moreover, it helps to become self-reliant. Travelling or working, young people meet the situations when they need to make decisions by themselves. As a rule due to this youth become adult and learn to manage their lifes.
Nevertheless, some people argue that having a gap year is a bad idea. They alleged that education should be continuing. When the students have a such long break in their study, they miss time, which is expected to be spent on education. As a result their peers might have some advantages over them.
To sum up, I do believe that taking a gap year is a great idea, which gives the students a chance to become more independent and get useful experience, that hepl them to make their own choice in life.
You also need to re-examine your use of commas.
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Сообщение от bolo83всезнающая дама предпенсионного возраста, которая сама непонятно как попала в Австралию
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Сообщение от Maimiti_Isabella Посмотреть сообщениеНет, я считаю, что начинать готовиться непосредственно к IELTS (if your target band is 6.5 or 7) только тогда, когда Вы достигните хорошего Intermediate. Или брать соответствующие учебники, кот. начинают 'доводить' до экзамена с Pre-Interm, но я с этим подходом все равно не согласна в условиях, когда нет каждодневной практики реального английского.
Everything. Нет ни единого предложения без серьезных ошибок в построении и выборе форм слов.
А что вы считаете каждодневной практикой? Просто я с маленьким ребенком сижу. Учусь сама (поскольку на несколько часов из дома уйти на занятия просто не реально). В интернете никаких нормальных рекомендаций по поводу самообучения я не нашла (ну кроме "берите и учитесь"). Распечатала пару учебников по грамматике. Каждый день пару часов их осваиваю: сначала грамматическую тему, потом решаю к ним задания + онлайн-тесты из интернета. Слушаю аудио с ВВС. По часу-два в день точно. Уже, может всего дословно не понимаю, но о чем тема беседы понимаю почти всегда. Учу слова. Вот пытаюсь сама чего-нибудь писать на инглишь. С National Geographic беру небольшие статьи и перевожу. Неужели без преподавателя эту стену все равно не пробить? А язык освоить хотелось бы побыстрее.
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Сообщение от Stacia Посмотреть сообщение....
Занимаясь по учебнику грамматики Вы и занимаетесь грамматикой. Как Вы считаете, можно ли выучить русский язык, занимаясь по учебнику грамматике? Зачем же тогда всякие учебники пишут, если учебника грамматики достаточно?
Возьмите нормальный учебник - не знаю что там у Вас есть. Я бы посоветовала серию Cutting Edge или, еще лучше, новая серия появилась Language Leader (не путать с Market Leader) - мне очень нравится. А вот к ней, в качестве пособия, учебник по грамматики. Там по каждой теме 5 уроков (по количеству учебных дней в неделю). Каждый 5-ый урок - Study skills на основе изученного материала. Очень удобно. Поднимите уровень языка, а потом уже можно непосредственно подготовкой к экзамену заняться. Иначе несколько раз сдавать будете и жаловаться на жизнь и несправедливость экзамена и экзаменаторов
С National Geographic беру небольшие статьи и перевожу
Неужели без преподавателя эту стену все равно не пробить?____________
Сообщение от bolo83всезнающая дама предпенсионного возраста, которая сама непонятно как попала в Австралию
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Сообщение от Maimiti_Isabella Посмотреть сообщениеVery boring sentences. Each sentence looks exactly like the previous one.
Сообщение от Maimiti_Isabella Посмотреть сообщениеYou also need to re-examine your use of commas.
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Привет всем гостям и постоянным посетителям этого замечательного сайта. Подкидываю вам свое сочинение. Не сочтите за труд, раскритикуйте и дайте оценку стилю и полноте ответа. Мне нужна 7.Экзамен через 10 дней...
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes.
Is this dependence on computers are good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Last decades has brought us a very clever and usefull high-tech devices- the computers, which sharply intruded almost in all spheres of our life. We start to use them for shopping, for making diagnosis in hospitals, in industries and rely on them even in air while trevelling on planes. In my opinion though, their field of work should be limited and be under strict control of human.
No doubt, computers and similar technologies make our life easer and more effective. They are accurate( their mistakes can be tragic but really not so frequently accure to compair with human's work), incredibly quick in processes and never getting tired. More over, this devices are never under stress, alcohol abbusing and never rob you on own wish. They are obedient robots who always do what you want from them.
But there is an other side of coin, of course. If judje computers themselves, you will certainly find - their work can't be so flexible in decisions. Especially, when the situation turns strange or out of rules, this clevest machines becomes absolutelly useless and stupid.And I recommend, they should be strictly avoided in hospitals, where diagnosis are maded not only according patient's complains but more according other subjective signs feeled by trained doctor.
If to go forward, the replaicement of people's places in some specialities by elctronics could have devastation result on economic and increase level of unemployment all around the world.This should certainly be taken in account during invention any new technology.
To sum up, I never want devaluate the meaning of high tech devices for our progress, but still concerned their work should be under strict control and be double-checked by trained person in difficult situations.IELTS 08.12.2012 L- 6.5, R-8.5, W-6.5, S-7, OVERALL-7
И когда же все это закончится?
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Сообщение от olesenka Посмотреть сообщениеПривет всем гостям и постоянным посетителям этого замечательного сайта. Подкидываю вам свое сочинение. Не сочтите за труд, раскритикуйте и дайте оценку стилю и полноте ответа. Мне нужна 7.Экзамен через 10 дней...
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes.
Is this dependence on computers are good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Last decades has brought us a very clever and usefull high-tech devices- the computers, which sharply intruded almost in all spheres of our life. We start to use them for shopping, for making diagnosis in hospitals, in industries and rely on them even in air while trevelling on planes. In my opinion though, their field of work should be limited and be under strict control of human.
No doubt, computers and similar technologies make our life easer and more effective. They are accurate( their mistakes can be tragic but really not so frequently accure to compair with human's work), incredibly quick in processes and never getting tired. More over, this devices are never under stress, alcohol abbusing and never rob you on own wish. They are obedient robots who always do what you want from them.
But there is an other side of coin, of course. If judje computers themselves, you will certainly find - their work can't be so flexible in decisions. Especially, when the situation turns strange or out of rules, this clevest machines becomes absolutelly useless and stupid.And I recommend, they should be strictly avoided in hospitals, where diagnosis are maded not only according patient's complains but more according other subjective signs feeled by trained doctor.
If to go forward, the replaicement of people's places in some specialities by elctronics could have devastation result on economic and increase level of unemployment all around the world.This should certainly be taken in account during invention any new technology.
To sum up, I never want devaluate the meaning of high tech devices for our progress, but still concerned their work should be under strict control and be double-checked by trained person in difficult situations.
1) Last decades has brought us a very clever and usefull high-tech devices- the computers, which sharply intruded almost in all spheres of our life. Почему артикль а - ведь пишите devices.
2) We start to use them for shopping, for making diagnosis in hospitals... Почему в настоящем времени?
3) And I recommend, they should be strictly avoided in hospitals, where diagnosis are maded not only according patient's complains but more according other subjective signs feeled by trained doctor. Maded - не верно, according + to, вместо trained лучше использовать qualified. Лучше не начинать предложения с and. Recommend зачем? Ведь задание было не дать рекомендацию или решение проблемы, а порассуждать за и против и выразить свое мнение.
Дальше по тексту еще много описок, ошибок (вместо сущ. используете прилагательное и т.д.).
Еще желательно использовать linking words подходящие.
Сорри, если что не так Ж-)
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А я не сдаюсь, господа. Вот мой следующий опус. На мой взгляд, корявый, но времени они тоже дают не ах. ПРИНИМАЮ КРИТИКУ. оШИБКИ SPELLING можете не исправлять- это делает Google. Но помогите со стилем и грамматикой, please.
More and more people work today in the large cities.Which problems can it cause? How should the governments encourage people to stay in small regional towns?
The question about overcrowding of large megapolicies stands acute nowadays, as amount of working population who tends to get own place in cities of wide opportunities increased enormously. seems, they have all rights to do so, if this disproportion of city-citizens to vilage-ones doesn't cause a lot of problems. But, in my opinion, there are some really effective preventive steps which government can take over.
To start with, it is becoming obvious for some part of population, what life in megapolicies getting harder every year because of tough traffic inside. Saying more, big cities look like a paralitic patient who can't move any more. With increasing average distance to work incontinence of roads causes more stress and aggression among population. In result, inspite of luxury opportunities staying here( as education, work,shopping), some people now searching places where they can get rid of all of this problems at once. And in such cases government should straight out it's shoulders for help.
First of all, to deminish disproportion in level of life between vilagers and citizens, the government can improve paiment for highly qualified doctors and teachers in remote areas, so the specialists of first-aid would be in easy touch. Of coarse, it would be difficult to improve also quality of their help simultaneously,but with standartization of proffesional registration troughout the country( as i have seen in Australia), this problem can be decided as well.
Secondly, people mostly look for signs of comfortability in remote area, such as well developed infrastracture, roads and public transport. By deciding this problems government can make life out of city more attractive.
Summarizing all above, previously succesful generation of large cities becoming inconvinient day by day, but by applying some attention government can control migration of population in and out of cities quite simply.Last edited by olesenka; 12.08.2010, 04:18.IELTS 08.12.2012 L- 6.5, R-8.5, W-6.5, S-7, OVERALL-7
И когда же все это закончится?
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