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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter:
Explain why you want to do the voluntary work.
State what your skills and experience are.
Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you regarding an opportunity of volunteering within your organisation. First of all, I woud like to express my respect and appreciation for "Cultural Expeditions" activity which helps to make developing world a better place. - Last sentence shouldn't be here. In first paragraph you are supposed to shortly state the reason for writing.
I obtained Bachelor's degree in medicine last summer. After graduation I have been working as a nurse in a hospital for a year. In addition to this a have five month of meaningful experience as a volunteer in an orphange in Peru where my duties included helping with daily routine such as preparing food, serving meals and cleaning. - First of all, try to organise you ideas in the same order as bullet points. Secondly, this paragraph starts a little unexpectedly. I would start with an introduction sentence, like I believe I possess certain skills that could be useful in ... And then I would describe them just like you did.
I would like to continue my volunteering experience working with children. I feel it is very imortant to introduce economically disadvantaged children to world culture breaking down barriers and misunderstandings. Also it would be great opportunity to practice and develop my social skills, increase self-confidence and experience the traditional lifestyle myself. - I like this paragraph. I would probably add some 'reason' vocabulary at the beginning to show that you are expressing your intents.
I would be gtateful if I could take three month volunteer trip to Africa, prepherably to Kenya, since June. - This one is too short. Try to make all 'bullet point' paragraphs even. In this case, I would do it like this - I would be grateful if ... to Africa. I am mostly interested in ... , but I am open to other options too. As for the dates, I ... (some personal info), so I will be able to start ...
Please, find enclosed my curricilum vitae and copy of medical references. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to receiving your reply. - Very nice. I like this one.
Yours faithfully,
Ekaterina Smith
Explain why you want to do the voluntary work.
State what your skills and experience are.
Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you regarding an opportunity of volunteering within your organisation. First of all, I woud like to express my respect and appreciation for "Cultural Expeditions" activity which helps to make developing world a better place. - Last sentence shouldn't be here. In first paragraph you are supposed to shortly state the reason for writing.
I obtained Bachelor's degree in medicine last summer. After graduation I have been working as a nurse in a hospital for a year. In addition to this a have five month of meaningful experience as a volunteer in an orphange in Peru where my duties included helping with daily routine such as preparing food, serving meals and cleaning. - First of all, try to organise you ideas in the same order as bullet points. Secondly, this paragraph starts a little unexpectedly. I would start with an introduction sentence, like I believe I possess certain skills that could be useful in ... And then I would describe them just like you did.
I would like to continue my volunteering experience working with children. I feel it is very imortant to introduce economically disadvantaged children to world culture breaking down barriers and misunderstandings. Also it would be great opportunity to practice and develop my social skills, increase self-confidence and experience the traditional lifestyle myself. - I like this paragraph. I would probably add some 'reason' vocabulary at the beginning to show that you are expressing your intents.
I would be gtateful if I could take three month volunteer trip to Africa, prepherably to Kenya, since June. - This one is too short. Try to make all 'bullet point' paragraphs even. In this case, I would do it like this - I would be grateful if ... to Africa. I am mostly interested in ... , but I am open to other options too. As for the dates, I ... (some personal info), so I will be able to start ...
Please, find enclosed my curricilum vitae and copy of medical references. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to receiving your reply. - Very nice. I like this one.
Yours faithfully,
Ekaterina Smith
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