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Сообщение от HappyHippo Посмотреть сообщениеУ меня дэдлайн в апреле С учетом того, что за год уровень не поднялся, время терять нельзя! Последняя надежда на эти 3 месяца!
Представьте, вам пришлось бы сейчас сдавать экзамен по физике за десятый класс. Ну прошли десяток тестов, ну поняли для себя, мол, это - знаю, это - не знаю, а дальше-то небось взяли бы учебник и начали учиться последовательно.
Я сама ни разу не книжный червь, и тоже люблю все делать наскоками и между делом, но то, что вы четыре раза сдавали экзамен, и при этом у вас нету грамматики - это даже для меня круто ))
Ни в коем случае не хочу вас обидеть, просто высказываю мнение,где, на мой взгляд, собака порылась.
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Сообщение от Marcella Посмотреть сообщениеслежу за вашей борьбой и искренне желаю удачи. Однако, позволю себе одно замечание. Вот вы пишете, что все тесты в мире прорешали, сотню эссе написали и т.д. А где системное обучение-то? Поправьте, если ошибаюсь.
Сообщение от Marcella Посмотреть сообщениеЯ сама ни разу не книжный червь, и тоже люблю все делать наскоками и между делом, но то, что вы четыре раза сдавали экзамен, и при этом у вас нету грамматики - это даже для меня круто ))
Ни в коем случае не хочу вас обидеть, просто высказываю мнение,где, на мой взгляд, собака порылась.
Спасибо, за ваши пожелания и да поможет нам всем Бог в покорении айлтсаGOT IT !!! TWICE !!!
IELTS 07.02.2015 L7.5 R7.5 W7.5 S7.5 O7.5
VISA GRANTED 31.07.2015 HAPPY !!! :D
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Сообщение от HappyHippo Посмотреть сообщение
Знали бы вы мой бэкграунд, вы бы вообще офигели
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Сообщение от Marcella Посмотреть сообщениедайте-ка угадаю. Журналистика? ))GOT IT !!! TWICE !!!
IELTS 07.02.2015 L7.5 R7.5 W7.5 S7.5 O7.5
VISA GRANTED 31.07.2015 HAPPY !!! :D
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у меня тоже застой, делаю одни и теже ошибки и никак не могу с ними разобраться. Пока смотрю в книгу- вроде все понимаю, как закрыла- все сразу из головы выветрилось ((( но я думаю что пока не готова экзакмен букать снова, как хоть какое-то улучшение будет- тогда возможно, но мне до августа надо все же сдатьIt is nice to be important but more important to be nice
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Сообщение от Mrs X Посмотреть сообщениеПока смотрю в книгу- вроде все понимаю, как закрыла- все сразу из головы выветрилосьGOT IT !!! TWICE !!!
IELTS 07.02.2015 L7.5 R7.5 W7.5 S7.5 O7.5
VISA GRANTED 31.07.2015 HAPPY !!! :D
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Сообщение от HappyHippo Посмотреть сообщениеМне же всегда кажется, что я делаю не хуже, чем в книге или на сайтеIt is nice to be important but more important to be nice
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Ребятки всем привет! Прошу раскритиковать мою работу, сильно не бить)))
тема: Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.
Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
In today’s life modern cities can offer the wide range of places to live in. Many people consider that houses are more convenient for living. Others make their choice to apartments. In this essay I will try to look deep into the problem and select the important points of choosing between a house and an apartment.
In my opinion for making correct choice, where it would be better to live, we have to think about our needs. If family is big and there are many children then probably a house is more reasonable. The locations of houses in big cities are usually at calm, quiet and save areas. Houses always have their own garages and often not only for one car but even for two, so you should not look for car parking. But there are other aspects of having a house. The most frequent problem for many people is the price of house; it includes rent or mortgage, taxes and utilities. The sum is depending on size of the house and its location, and sometimes as high that people are unable to pay for it. One more problem is cleaning the house; even if it is small you should spend a lot of time on doing home tasks.
On the other hand it seems that apartments may stay the solution. The great numbers of block of flats are usually located in downtowns. It means that in the area you can find many different stores, markets, cafes, and the access to social transport. But it also has bad sides. For example if you have a car you often have to pay for parking. For family with children an apartment has too small space and safety on a low level.
To conclude, I should say that to make the decision people need to think about those characteristics that the most important for all members of your family because both a house and an apartment have as advantages as disadvantages. So the best choice depends on your own reasons.
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Много проблем с артиклями и порядком слов в предложениях, плюс не очень структура (почитайте мануалы).
Сообщение от Baraulka Посмотреть сообщениеРебятки всем привет! Прошу раскритиковать мою работу, сильно не бить)))
тема: Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.
Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
In today’s life modern cities can offer the wide range of places to live in. Many people consider that houses are more convenient for living. Others make their choice to apartments. In this essay I will try to look deep into the problem and select the important points of choosing between a house and an apartment.
In my opinion for making correct choice, where it would be better to live, we have to think about our needs. If family is big and there are many children then probably a house is more reasonable. The locations of houses in big cities are usually at calm, quiet and save areas. Houses always have their own garages and often not only for one car but even for two, so you should not look for car parking. But there are other aspects of having a house. The most frequent problem for many people is the price of house; it includes rent or mortgage, taxes and utilities. The sum is depending on size of the house and its location, and sometimes as high that people are unable to pay for it. One more problem is cleaning the house; even if it is small you should spend a lot of time on doing home tasks.
On the other hand it seems that apartments may stay the solution. The great numbers of block of flats are usually located in downtowns. It means that in the area you can find many different stores, markets, cafes, and the access to social transport. But it also has bad sides. For example if you have a car you often have to pay for parking. For family with children an apartment has too small space and safety on a low level.
To conclude, I should say that to make the decision people need to think about those characteristics that the most important for all members of your family because both a house and an apartment have as advantages as disadvantages. So the best choice depends on your own reasons.
слов 337, 43 минутыIELTS: L9/R8.5/W8/S8.5, история + материалы.
Visa lodged 17.01.15. Form 80: 03.02.14, medicals 05.04.15, grant 08.10.15.
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Сообщение от Baraulka Посмотреть сообщениеСпасибо, за отклик! как считаете на какую оценку тянет? мне надо минимум 5, экзамен планирую на мартIELTS: L9/R8.5/W8/S8.5, история + материалы.
Visa lodged 17.01.15. Form 80: 03.02.14, medicals 05.04.15, grant 08.10.15.
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Добрый день! Прошу посмотреть и оценить эссе. На что обратить внимание, что подтянуть?
Тема.
Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development a country. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
254 слова, времени чуть больше 40 мин, т.к. еще в начале пути. Спасибо заранее!
Само эссе.
No doubt, education is necessary and mostly in many countries it is mandatory. Furthermore, as a rule, children begin to go to school at 5-7 years. Teachers give them main basic in literacy. Children are our future generation. When we have high educated population we could have strong developed country.
Nevertheless, education is not the only factor which makes country powerful. For example, elder people need high quality medicine. It is not a secret that when person becomes elder, he or she has more diseases. We should take care about our parents and grandparents, as they are our roots. Moreover, our elder persons cares, could show our children importance of help.
Furthermore, to development of a country we need to have enough places of work for grownups. As everybody knows, adults pay taxes from their income. Therefore government split tax revenue among budgets, for instance education, healthcare, military necessity and so on. So, adults who are succeed in his or her job can get more salary, as a consequence, pay more taxes. This can improve other index of quality, such as education or medicine.
In conclusion, we should have balance between all those factors which mentioned above to have successful community. Therefore, it is necessary to have mandatory education for kids, high-qualified medicine for elder persons and a variety of work places for adults to develop country.
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Привет , ребята! Мне тут тему для сочинения дал тьютор: Does modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler?
Сижу уже полчаса, не могу план составить Тема сформулирована не так, как я привыкла, нет вопроса: дискасс там или бенефитс. Мне сравнивать прошлую жизнь с настоящей что ли?GOT IT !!! TWICE !!!
IELTS 07.02.2015 L7.5 R7.5 W7.5 S7.5 O7.5
VISA GRANTED 31.07.2015 HAPPY !!! :D
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