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[Maimiti_Isabella]

Ощущение, нагородил, что черт ногу сломит.

Nowadays, some people relocate far away from the big smoke to the countryside. They claim that instead of ill health and the hustle and bustle they gain idyllic life in the quiet environment. While skeptics say that villages have inadequate infrastructure, people who have already moved to the rural area argue that they are glad with provision of services. For example, many cottages are equipped with central heating or the Internet. The World Wide Web makes it possible for people telecommuting rather than to work at local farmers.

Moreover, many of those people, who abandoned metropolises, have changed their mind about many things. For instance, they feel that their motto “Double Income, No Kids” is just a utopian idea and they start to enjoy parenthood.

Quite impressive, really. You managed to use almost all the the words correctly and have done this in a clear and coherent way.

A couple of things to consider.
The Internet and central heating in a cottage are not services (and why you're talking about cottages anyway? These are not holiday homes!). But a company can provide these services.

Hustle and bustle - look up the collocation's usage.

A really difficult one to explain: to be glad
I was not even sure what was wrong here, it just sounds wrong and then I realised it's the preposition. You cannot be glad 'with' something. You can be happy with something though.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Ну да , как то не очень вышло
Но вроде отдохнул и вот что получилось

In the modern world, a significant number of people have been relocating to rural areas, trying to escape the hustle and bustle of the big smoke. According to resent research, the development of telecommuting has largely contributed to this trend, when many of DINKs can keep (sustain?) their jobs while living in the countryside. When they arrive to the new location, it seems to them as an idyllic place. However, their utopian beliefs of a peaceful and quite life in rural environment sometimes might not become true. For instance, it could be challenging for many individuals to get used to poor infrastructure and the absence of some facilities, such as gyms, fast broadband internet connection and public transport. As a result of these, a certain percentage of tree and sea changers may become dissatisfied with their new surroundings, and could return to their home city.

Совсем другое дело!
topian beliefs of a peaceful and quite life in rural environment sometimes might not become true - выучите как использовать слово realise в этом контексте.

As a result of these - что такое здесь these? и вообще зачем оно надо?

Also, have a look below and decide which one sounds better.

For instance, it could be challenging for many individuals to get used to ...

--> For many, for instance, it could present a real challenge to adapt to ..... --> For many, for instance, adapting to.... can/could/might present a serious challenge


may become dissatisfied - consider: disgruntled / frustrated

[Maimiti_Isabella]

The main reason why businessmen become DINKs - is their desire to become rich and popular. They believe that children do not contribute to reach their goal and think that the life without kids is idyllic. Usually such people live in a big smoke and have a full plate. However one day DINKs become tired from hustle and bustle of big city and understand that their dream is utopian. So they abandon their businesses, relocate to a small town and find themselves in telecommuting.

Простите, а откуда вдруг взялалсь идея businessmen и businesses? И что значит become DINKs? Они есть become DINKs.

However one day DINKs become tired - т.е. это правило?

В общем, у меня серьезные проблемы с развитием идеи. Как-то я все время 'спотыкаюсь' на нелогичности.

[julyp]

Sea change or tree change gains popularity in our days. People abandon city life and move to villages or sea coasts because there are no hustle and bustle in countryside. In addition, people enjoy peaceful, idyllic or even utopian life in countryside.

Of course, life in a village has minuses, for example, you may have difficulty with job searching. However many people may found telecommuting through the internet. Fewer and fewer circumstances prevent people from moving to the village these days. Everybody can relocate to village or sea cost now: young and old, families with children and DINK families. However, there are two categories of people who usually migrate to countryside. The first category is retirees and ill health people. The second one is people who want to rest from the big smoke; they usually shift to the coast.

Although there is urban sprawl nowadays, this sea change is becoming more popular than ever.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

However, there are some people who prefer to relocate outside an urban area. Usually, this is DINKs families. They suppose that idyllic place for them to live is so far away from the big smoke and hustle and bustle areas. These families only need comfortable infrastructure and service provided for telecommunications. This easy life for them can be an utopian. Probably they will be bored or have kids soon. This will be a reason for them to move back to cities.

Не поняла, However - это вообще к чему? Предыдущих идей-то нет!

telecommunication vs. telecommunications vs. telecommuting

[od1n]

Практически все слова употреблены правильно, (см ниже), но уж так наворочено, что я несколько раз каждое предложение должна была прочитать, чтобы понять о чем речь!

Вы не могли бы, например, вот это в что-нибудь более удобоваримое превратить?

Намеренно в этот раз сделал позаковыристей предложения, хотя и без особой на то причины. А так - я знаком с рекомендацией, что стоит избегать настолько сложных конструкций в экзаменационном эссе. Переделывать уже не буду, но последующие задания буду делать много проще.

И наверное лучше все-таки DINK families

Согласен, запорол.

Ну и ваше but в начале предложения меня просто убило!

Сошлюсь на помутнение рассудка из-за вечерней усталости

The word people appears 4 times. Any particular reason for this?

No actual reason behind it. Just haven't paid enough attention for word repetitions.

[Тина]

Тяж=Maimiti_Isabelписать 2408]Простите, а откуда вдруг взялалсь идея businessmen и businesses? И что значит become DINKs? Они есть become DINKs.

However one day DINKs become tired - т.е. это правило?

В общем, у меня серьезные проблемы с развитием идеи. Как-то я все время 'спотыкаюсь' на нелогичности.[/QUOTE]

Спасибо за комментарий!

Идея взялась чтоб не писать в очередной раз people and work..
Вы правы там правильнее businessmen are DINKs
У меня по жизни тяжело с сочинениями и выдумываниями идеи о чем писать...
Буду тренироваться и стараться писать логичнее...

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Recent statistics has ilustrated that many people prefer relocating from big cities to idyllic small towns, as the result of all these hustle and bustle of the big smoke. Living there allows individuals to lead more relaxed lifestyle as well as to do the same jobs as they did in large cities due to teleworking technologies. However, all of this may turn out to be an utopian of the modern world, because such males and females may become isolated and reserved because of lack of communication and meeting people in real life.

as the result of all these hustle and bustle of the big smoke - It's not clear what the bolded refer to?

an utopian - a missing noun?

such males and females - Yuk!

reserved -???
and some other issues. But the ideas are good though you didn't follow the rules : you didn't use all of the words from the list and didn't use at least 2 words from the previous lists.

[NortT]

Quite impressive, really. You managed to use almost all the the words correctly and have done this in a clear and coherent way.

A couple of things to consider.
The Internet and central heating in a cottage are not services (and why you're talking about cottages anyway? These are not holiday homes!). But a company can provide these services.

Hustle and bustle - look up the collocation's usage.

A really difficult one to explain: to be glad
I was not even sure what was wrong here, it just sounds wrong and then I realised it's the preposition. You cannot be glad 'with' something. You can be happy with something though.

Thanks a lot for your explanations!

Why do you say that a cottage is a holiday home? From my knowledge it is just a country house which might be a holiday cottage or might not. Is not it right? What I mean is that people move from their flats to country houses such as, for example, cottages. Anyway, I didn't mean something special.

Hustle and bustle - Should I use it something like that? "... hustle and bustle of the big cities ...". Should I use "the" with "hustle and bustle"?

I read a dictionary. I suppose that "people might be glad about".

[Pashich]

as the result of all these hustle and bustle of the big smoke - It's not clear what the bolded refer to?

an utopian - a missing noun?

such males and females - Yuk!

reserved -???
and some other issues. But the ideas are good though you didn't follow the rules : you didn't use all of the words from the list and didn't use at least 2 words from the previous lists.

as the result of all these hustle and bustle of the big smoke - It's not clear what the bolded refer to?

Right you are. It should be: as a result of all hustle and bustle of big smoke.

an utopian - a missing noun?

That's a real fault. I should've written an utopia of the modern world

such males and females - Yuk!

What's wrong with males and females ? Aren't they people ?

reserved -???

[Cambr. DIct]reserved : not wanting to show what you are thinking or feeling (замкнутый, необщительный)

you didn't use all of the words from the list and didn't use at least 2 words from the previous lists

Sorry, I read only main rules on the first page. Next time I will do include old words.
I didn't use the word DINK, because I'm not condifent with the use of this word. As the old saw goes : Can't bet 100$ on the word don't use it

[<кирилл>]

Совсем другое дело!
Utopian beliefs of a peaceful and quite life in rural environment sometimes might not become true - выучите как использовать слово realise в этом контексте.

As a result of these - что такое здесь these? и вообще зачем оно надо?

Also, have a look below and decide which one sounds better.


--> For many, for instance, it could present a real challenge to adapt to ..... --> For many, for instance, adapting to.... can/could/might present a serious challenge


may become dissatisfied - consider: disgruntled / frustrated

Utopian beliefs of a peaceful and quite life in rural environment sometimes might not be realised наверно так

These это poor infrustructure and the absence of some facilities
Но лучше просто as a result

Мне нравится For many, for instance, it could present a real challenge to adapt to ...

[Mrs X]

Не поняла, However - это вообще к чему? Предыдущих идей-то нет!

telecommunication vs. telecommunications vs. telecommuting

Ха-Ха, это я типа продолжала первые два задания )))

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Have we finished with this story?

I'm pretty sure I've overlooked somebody ...

[z11aalex]

Have we finished with this story?

I'm pretty sure I've overlooked somebody ...

don't forget me, please

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Сложновато для меня, для DINKs место так и не нашлось

Many people like the idea of tree change from the big smoke where they currently live in. Apparently the hustle and bustle of big cities contributes to this, inclining people to relocate to the country side.
The usual idyllic place at the country side people imagine is often comprised of a green lawn with a country house surrounded by bushes making the whole picture utopian. Hence most people realize that not every country side can accommodate current life style requirements; for instance to provide basic infrastructure and facilities for telecommuting such as a broadband connection to internet. Additionally the provision of services, including medical assistance, might be provided with considerable delay that discourage ill health persons from the idea of tree change.

Очень неплохо. Практически все слова употреблены правильно. Жалко, что для DINKs место не нашлось.

Проверьте как используется слово incline.
ill health - уже существительное с прилагательным, так что они само по себе самодостаточные
и откуда вы вот эту прелесть взяли: persons?
countryside пишется вместе