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Some people prefer to spend their time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
It is an interesting fact that person who have a lot of outdoor activity have a more long life duration. Majority of the people prefer to relax after hard workday in a comfortable place . I would like to spend my leisure time outdoors rather than indoors. There are many reasons which can prove my solution, but the most fundamental facilities are: outdoor games, chat with friends and physical activity
The first reason for outdoor activity are sport games and competitions . I like to play football, basketball and many others active games with my good friends (удалил нелепый кусок. Англоязычные так не выражаются.) . In the ancient times Greece's managers and employees carried for their workers and tried to organize their free time. They have discovered a lot of active games and some of them are used now in ”Olympic games”
The second reason of/for <чего-то-нибудь> is a communication with friends. I am (сокращать в официальной переписке нельзя) an extravert and I like to have conversation with my old friends. Due to outdoor activity I have an excellent chance to talk with my friends about a new movies, concerts and other events. In a 17-th century a lot of women liked a long walks. They got enjoy from talk with other women. They talked about their husbands, politic information, king's life and others events .
The last one reason is a physical training . Nowadays we are exposed by an environment pollution . That is why I try to improve my life stile. I am jogging before and after my working day. Such activity help my to keep my body in good condition and I feel myself healthy and stronger. Almost all of famous international runners started their career from simple jogging around the park.
In short, every person tries to find a type leisure activity after working day. I am (Про сокращения писал выше) an active person and I can't just sit on a coach and watch TV. That is why, I like to spent my day off or free time outside [b] playing in outdoor games, communication with friends, and keeping my health in good mood.
Some people prefer to spend their time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
It is an interesting fact that person who have a lot of outdoor activity have a more long life duration. Majority of the people prefer to relax after hard workday in a comfortable place . I would like to spend my leisure time outdoors rather than indoors. There are many reasons which can prove my solution, but the most fundamental facilities are: outdoor games, chat with friends and physical activity
The first reason for outdoor activity are sport games and competitions . I like to play football, basketball and many others active games with my good friends (удалил нелепый кусок. Англоязычные так не выражаются.) . In the ancient times Greece's managers and employees carried for their workers and tried to organize their free time. They have discovered a lot of active games and some of them are used now in ”Olympic games”
The second reason of/for <чего-то-нибудь> is a communication with friends. I am (сокращать в официальной переписке нельзя) an extravert and I like to have conversation with my old friends. Due to outdoor activity I have an excellent chance to talk with my friends about a new movies, concerts and other events. In a 17-th century a lot of women liked a long walks. They got enjoy from talk with other women. They talked about their husbands, politic information, king's life and others events .
The last one reason is a physical training . Nowadays we are exposed by an environment pollution . That is why I try to improve my life stile. I am jogging before and after my working day. Such activity help my to keep my body in good condition and I feel myself healthy and stronger. Almost all of famous international runners started their career from simple jogging around the park.
In short, every person tries to find a type leisure activity after working day. I am (Про сокращения писал выше) an active person and I can't just sit on a coach and watch TV. That is why, I like to spent my day off or free time outside [b] playing in outdoor games, communication with friends, and keeping my health in good mood.
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