Tweet
Сообщение от HolyMolly
Посмотреть сообщение
О! Ребята разошлись критиковать по делу. 
Молодцы!
А ну у кого еще помидоры остались, налетай - подешевело!
Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is obvious that there is a huge gap between undeveloped countries and developed ones in terms of social and economic situation. Some people think that education is only one major aspect which should be improved in undeveloped regions of the world. On the other hand, opponents believe that there are many issues to be resolved there, such as standards of living and demographic setting. This essay will discuss both views.
(Of course лучше заменить на Certainly или first, например, или first af all), education is one of the basics that should be developed in the third world's countries. Without well-educated specialists is is absolutely impossible to build the future. For instance, it is hard to imagine how a factory or a plant is built in a country which does not possess high-qualified engineers. Thus, educational system is one of the key factors in less developed countries. (developing countries=less developed countries=developing nation)
Another important element which should be improved is living standarts. The governments of undeveloped countries should make their efforts to alleviate poverty and raise (living standards- может лучше заменить, чтобы не повторяться на что-то вроде living conditions and living wage) in their regions. Moreover, it could motivate young people to make their success while studying. Therefore, welfare is also very important (может лучше significant) for the Third World countries.
Additionally, probably most crucial factor in developing countries is a demographic situation. (This is obvious - уже использовали, может заменить на Evidentially or It is evident) that both birth-rate and death-rate should be strongly controlled in countries where a problem of overpopulation exists. It is extremely vital to guarantee enough food and essential commodities for everyone citizen (или просто everyone или every citizen) in a country. Consequently, a shortage of goods may demotivate people in building healthy society.
To summarize, undoubtedly, the education system is a major factor in economics growth, whereas there are other aspects to deal with, such as the demographic setting and high living standards. I am inclined to believe that if a country implies all of the three factors, it will have all the chances to survive in the modern world and to reach the level of developed countries.
Молодцы!А ну у кого еще помидоры остались, налетай - подешевело!
Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is obvious that there is a huge gap between undeveloped countries and developed ones in terms of social and economic situation. Some people think that education is only one major aspect which should be improved in undeveloped regions of the world. On the other hand, opponents believe that there are many issues to be resolved there, such as standards of living and demographic setting. This essay will discuss both views.
(Of course лучше заменить на Certainly или first, например, или first af all), education is one of the basics that should be developed in the third world's countries. Without well-educated specialists is is absolutely impossible to build the future. For instance, it is hard to imagine how a factory or a plant is built in a country which does not possess high-qualified engineers. Thus, educational system is one of the key factors in less developed countries. (developing countries=less developed countries=developing nation)
Another important element which should be improved is living standarts. The governments of undeveloped countries should make their efforts to alleviate poverty and raise (living standards- может лучше заменить, чтобы не повторяться на что-то вроде living conditions and living wage) in their regions. Moreover, it could motivate young people to make their success while studying. Therefore, welfare is also very important (может лучше significant) for the Third World countries.
Additionally, probably most crucial factor in developing countries is a demographic situation. (This is obvious - уже использовали, может заменить на Evidentially or It is evident) that both birth-rate and death-rate should be strongly controlled in countries where a problem of overpopulation exists. It is extremely vital to guarantee enough food and essential commodities for everyone citizen (или просто everyone или every citizen) in a country. Consequently, a shortage of goods may demotivate people in building healthy society.
To summarize, undoubtedly, the education system is a major factor in economics growth, whereas there are other aspects to deal with, such as the demographic setting and high living standards. I am inclined to believe that if a country implies all of the three factors, it will have all the chances to survive in the modern world and to reach the level of developed countries.
Немного нужно подкорректировать введение, т.к. оно должно содержать краткую инфу о том, что вы собираетесь писать. То есть, если вы пишете про уровень жизни и демографическую ситуацию, то и во введение нужно это упомянуть.
Мне мой тичер говорил, что надо делать вот так. Спрошу завтра.
Все сайты из региона UK используют EDUCATION SYSTEM.
Comment