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In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent
years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
Last time there has been noticed a growth in the number of cases when teenagers were involved in social problems. Some people believe that the reason of this is in the lack of parental attention caused by their extreme business. Let’s try to analyze in what extent this statement is true.
During last decades lifestyle of the family have changed noticeably. Last time many people work far from their homes and spend much time on the way at work and back home. Also, nowadays most often situation is when both parents work, while in the middle of twentieth century non-working mothers which stayed at home with children where most common. Another considerable change in life of family is that it became nuclear, which means that older generation, grandmothers and grandfathers, does not take as significant part in life of its descendants as it did before. Main reason of this change is that senior people often continue working even after they have reached pensionable age. Due to this, they also cannot spend much time with their grandchildren.
Thus, teenagers are left without adult supervision after their school lessons are finished and there is a risk to contact a bad company and to get into the trouble.
Nevertheless, I assume that situation is not hopeless and the decisions for this problem do exist. First of all, parents, however busy they are at work, should always be aware of what is going on in their children’s life. They can also make some special time for common activities with children. Next decision for parents is to their interests, like sport or photo clubs etc. This way teenagers will not hang about on the streets and will be occupied with a useful activities.
Resuming all mentioned above, I want to say that world is changing gradually and this changes inevitably affects the family life. Negative changes is a challenge to a modern society and the family should take it even if it demands some efforts to make, because the future of new generation depends on it.
Покритикуйте пожалуйста мое эссе. То, что слишком длинно, понятно
In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent
years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
Last time there has been noticed a growth in the number of cases when teenagers were involved in social problems. Some people believe that the reason of this is in the lack of parental attention caused by their extreme business. Let’s try to analyze in what extent this statement is true.
During last decades lifestyle of the family have changed noticeably. Last time many people work far from their homes and spend much time on the way at work and back home. Also, nowadays most often situation is when both parents work, while in the middle of twentieth century non-working mothers which stayed at home with children where most common. Another considerable change in life of family is that it became nuclear, which means that older generation, grandmothers and grandfathers, does not take as significant part in life of its descendants as it did before. Main reason of this change is that senior people often continue working even after they have reached pensionable age. Due to this, they also cannot spend much time with their grandchildren.
Thus, teenagers are left without adult supervision after their school lessons are finished and there is a risk to contact a bad company and to get into the trouble.
Nevertheless, I assume that situation is not hopeless and the decisions for this problem do exist. First of all, parents, however busy they are at work, should always be aware of what is going on in their children’s life. They can also make some special time for common activities with children. Next decision for parents is to their interests, like sport or photo clubs etc. This way teenagers will not hang about on the streets and will be occupied with a useful activities.
Resuming all mentioned above, I want to say that world is changing gradually and this changes inevitably affects the family life. Negative changes is a challenge to a modern society and the family should take it even if it demands some efforts to make, because the future of new generation depends on it.
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