My essay, проверьте, покритикуйте! Спасибо!

[L.Daisy]

К сожалению, такие "рассуждательные" темы мне с трудом даются, потратил минут 50.

А когда у вас экзамен?
Здесь выход один - писать больше сочинений, чтобы "набить руку" на построении рассуждений

[Dop2007]

А когда у вас экзамен?
Здесь выход один - писать больше сочинений, чтобы "набить руку" на построении рассуждений

Через 2 недели. Стараюсь каждый день писать, писать и писать..

[L.Daisy]

Через 2 недели. Стараюсь каждый день писать, писать и писать

совсем скоро...
Удачи Вам, крепких нервов и хороших тем на экзамене

[Dop2007]

совсем скоро...
Удачи Вам, крепких нервов и хороших тем на экзамене

Спасибо!


У меня тут возникли затруднения с письмом..
Тема: "вы собираетесь уходить с работы, напишите письмо своему боссу, где сообщите, что больше всего нравилось, почему уходите и т.п."

В каком времени все это описывать, интересно? Я еще же работаю, значит, наверное, Present Perfect преимущественно?

Вот, например:

[...] First of all let me thank you for all the years I spent (have spent?) working in your company. I really enjoyed (или have enjoyed?) this time. I have had great colleagues and good salary. The projects I took part in (have taken?) were very interesting and I have got enough experience to be able to work in any other IT company. [...]

Что-то у меня каша в голове образовалась..

[Алексей Викторович]

ИМХО я бы все писал в Indefinite, кроме последнего, которое говорит о каком то результате из прошлого Perfect.
I have got an enough experience
Встречный вопрос an надо ставить?

[Dop2007]

ИМХО я бы все писал в Indefinite, кроме последнего, которое говорит о каком то результате из прошлого Perfect.
I have got an enough experience
Встречный вопрос an надо ставить?

"an" точно не надо.
Пожалуй, часть действительно лучше в настоящем времени, часть в Present Perfect.

First of all let me thank you for all the years I have spent working in your company. I have really enjoyed this time. I have great colleagues and good salary. The projects I take part in are interesting and I have got enough experience to be able to work in any other IT company.

[L.Daisy]

У меня тут возникли затруднения с письмом..
Тема: "вы собираетесь уходить с работы, напишите письмо своему боссу, где сообщите, что больше всего нравилось, почему уходите и т.п."

В каком времени все это описывать, интересно? Я еще же работаю, значит, наверное, Present Perfect преимущественно?

Я бы писала в перфекте.

[Murat]

Прошу обстоятельно проехаться по всему эссе. Никак немогу вычислить, что писать и как. В общем если есть время, то будте добры.

Some people believe that students work better if they are afraid of their teachers. Others believe that it is better if they have friendly relationships with their teachers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that quality of knowledge depends on teachers. Their experience and knowledge are most important things. There is another one important part, which needs for getting good education. It is a quality of connection between teachers and students.
First and foremost, students should have a lot of attention during the lesson. This goal can be achieved by disciplined behavior of students. Some people think that the only strict teacher can provide it. Moreover, students are likely to try doing their homework best if they have a strict teacher. Besides, it is hardly ever anyone would like to play truant because they aware that punishment should come.
Students would be grateful to know more about the subject if teacher is their friend. Of course, it goes without saying that they will not hesitate ask questions at their teacher in case they do not understand something. In practice, teachers, who enjoy their authority over students, usually know everything about their problems. This circumstance makes their connection better.
I have got mixed feelings about what kind of teachers should be better. Each side of previous statements has good and bad moments. I tend to agree that strict teacher would be better for education, but I would not like to afraid my teacher.

[Алексей Андреевич]

Прошу обстоятельно проехаться по всему эссе. Никак немогу вычислить, что писать и как. В общем если есть время, то будте добры.

Some people believe that students work better if they are afraid of their teachers. Others believe that it is better if they have friendly relationships with their teachers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that quality of knowledge depends on teachers. Their experience and knowledge are most important things. There is another one important part, which needs for getting good education. It is a quality of connection between teachers and students.
First and foremost, students should have a lot of attention during the lesson. This goal can be achieved by disciplined behavior of students. Some people think that the only strict teacher can provide it. Moreover, students are likely to try doing their homework best if they have a strict teacher. Besides, it is hardly ever anyone would like to play truant because they aware that punishment should come.
Students would be grateful to know more about the subject if teacher is their friend. Of course, it goes without saying that they will not hesitate ask questions at their teacher in case they do not understand something. In practice, teachers, who enjoy their authority over students, usually know everything about their problems. This circumstance makes their connection better.
I have got mixed feelings about what kind of teachers should be better. Each side of previous statements has good and bad moments. I tend to agree that strict teacher would be better for education, but I would not like to afraid my teacher.

ИМХО вам надо начинать с начала:
1. понимание вопроса и структурирование
2. аргументирование выдвинутых идей
3. четкое формирование собственного мнения, т.к. в задании звучит: give your opinion

Посмотрите внимательно на форуме и на сайте g-day все, что с этим связано. Мне очень помогло.
Грамматику и построение предложений стоит наверное уже после отшлифовки вышеупомянутых моментов обсуждать

[Алексей Андреевич]

Я со своей стороны еще раз выношу на общественное порицание свой вновь написанный письменный экзамен в полном объеме, взяв темы из Longman Ielts preparation tests. Писал все сразу: и письмо и эссе, опоздал по времени на пару минут. Беспокоит все-таки плохая читаемость моего почерка в данных временных условиях, а также то, что ОЧЕНЬ мало остается времени на проверку и корректировку.
Откомментируйте, раскритикуйте - буду признателен, а то мне 2 недели осталось до экзамена. Дотяну ли до 7-ки, вот в чем вопрос...

TASK 1
You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the costs.

Dear Mr and Mrs Smith,

I am writing to you in connection with a problem I met on my arrival home. But first of all I should say that the flight was wonderful and I must thank you for advising me this particular airline.

When I got home and began to unpack my things I realized that something was missing. At first, I could not figure out what were the things I lost, but then I saw that laptop was with me and its bag was missing. You should remember that I used it to keep my papers in it during the classes. Moreover, I put all the photos in it and they were very important for me because I had no other pictures of you and your town.

I would be very grateful if you find an opportunity to send the bag to me. You may choose any delivery service that you find most convenient and then just let me know which one is it. Do not worry about the cost of the delivery, because I will cover all the expenses. You will find my full address on the envelope.

Thank you in advance,
Sincerely yours, Alex.


198 words
20 minutes
Several spelling mistakes corrected while transferring the text to the computer.

TASK 2
Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time.
To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

In the modern world everything seems to be a subject to change: jobs, politics, economy, ecology, even people themselves. Some say that in this fast changing era people’s interests are not constant and simply reflect trends of our time. To my mind, hobbies, on the contrary, represent a connection of times and remain permanent. In this essay I will try to prove this point of view.

To begin with, sports were people’s most popular interests at all times. There is no fashion that can make a person go out on a court and suffer pain just to feel real satisfaction afterwards. Kinds of sports do change in time, but people’s addiction to sport remains unchanged.

Secondly, reading that seems to be an eternal hobby, never goes out of fashion. As long as humanity exists, it has always been fond of reading. Looking back in Antique ages we find people spending their time with a book.

The third hobby that cannot be affected by any trend is travelling. Ever since a person is born, he is always looking for something new in his or her life to discover. Travelling has become very popular nowadays thanks to the fast development of new technologies, but in past times it was also one of the most interesting hobbies. The only difference is that earlier people travelled on foot and now they do it by air.

On the other hand, there are reasons to consider some hobbies just reflection of modern trends. Computer games and watching TV are some things that came into our life in the 20th Century and certainly became popular when only they came into fashion. But these interests are temporary and will be definitely replaced by some new technologies invented in future.

To conclude, I should say that though modern technologies have some effect on people’s hobbies, real interests remain constant and cannot be influenced by any fashion.

317 words
42 minutes

[Алексей Викторович]

Well done! C моей точки зрения, письмо и эссе классические на 7 как минимум. Я лично так не напишу. Ну может вот эти вещи я бы написал по другому.

But first of all I should say that the flight was wonderful and I must thank you for advising me this particular airline.

C одной стороны идея про самолеты придала интересную черту письму, а с другой обычно благодарят за хорошее hospitality. Может экзаменатор консерватор?

I realized that something was missing

I realized that something was missed? (что-то пропало, а не было пропадающим?)

Some say that ...

One could say ... (так обычно говорят?)[/quote]

[Алексей Андреевич]

Well done! C моей точки зрения, письмо и эссе классические на 7 как минимум. Я лично так не напишу. Ну может вот эти вещи я бы написал по другому.

But first of all I should say that the flight was wonderful and I must thank you for advising me this particular airline.

C одной стороны идея про самолеты придала интересную черту письму, а с другой обычно благодарят за хорошее hospitality. Может экзаменатор консерватор?

I realized that something was missing

I realized that something was missed? (что-то пропало, а не было пропадающим?)

Some say that ...

One could say ... (так обычно говорят?)

[/quote]

Спасибо.

Насчет благодарности за гостеприимство в письме - это абсолютно точно. Согласен, что следовало вобще больше неформальных благодарностей включить. Как мне уже совершенно верно подсказал один знающий человек, после полугода проживания в одной квартире можно было бы и побольше теплых чувств выразить.

something was missing - с грамматической точки зрения абсолютно правильный оборот. А вот was missed сказать точно нельзя.

Some say that ... - действительно, пожалуй, стоило бы лучше написать some people say/it is often said that...

Спасибо, тезка, еще раз.

[IMA30]

Кому не лень, оцените пожалуйста мое эссе. Потратил на него чуть меньше 50 минут, но это первый раз, когда я смог написать сразу на английском и уложился в 1 час.


In Australia, Aboriginal lands have been used by settlers to establish farms and colonies, with many agreements being broken by settlers, leaving the Aboriginals without their land, money and heritage. Given that governments are working to a worldwide leadership as a group, what policies would you recommend for the protection of native people and their rights in such colonies as Australia?



The expansion of Western civilization during the last centuries has significantly affected people's life in many countries. Native people in Australia often had to leave their land and considerably change the way of living. Today it's widely recognized that some steps should be taken to protect the rights of Aboriginal people in Australia. This essay will look at some measures, such as letting aboriginal people live in the same way as their ancestors used to, and giving them financial and other types of support.

First of all, Australian Aboriginals should be allowed to live in the same way in which their ancestors used to. For example, if they want to live in the bush without any contact with modern civilization, the government have to provide this opportunity and prohibit non-aboriginal people to contact them in any way. That would support those Aboriginals who are not able to or do not want to adapt to the modern life. Moreover, if such legislation will take place, the rights of Aboriginal people to live in their own country in the way they want to would be protected.

Secondly, native people of Australia should be supported if they are willing to become a part of modern society. Australian government have to provide them appropriate education and give financial support. Eventually, with government's help the process of transition from traditional to modern lifestyle would be much easier. The rights of Aboriginals to be the part of their country's society would also be supported.

In conclusion, it would be great help for Australian native people if the government take care of them by letting them live in the way they want to and giving them financial support. That will obviously raise their quality of life and remove the tension between Australian Aboriginals and settlers.


299 слов

[Алексей Андреевич]

Кому не лень, оцените пожалуйста мое эссе. Потратил на него чуть меньше 50 минут, но это первый раз, когда я смог написать сразу на английском и уложился в 1 час.

299 слов

По моему, неплохо. Сам стиль показался немного нечитабельным, но это ИМХО. Оценивать не берусь, пока сам не получу свои первые (и дай Бог последние) marks, но в целом вроде нормально. Особых ошибок не заметил, только вот можно было бы заменить Aboriginals на indigenous people для разнообразия языка, но это так, придирки.

Еще:

Australian government have to provide them appropriate education

Если не ошибаюсь, то provide smb with smth

[IMA30]

Еще:

Australian government have to provide them appropriate education

Если не ошибаюсь, то provide smb with smth

Да, конечно. Оборот вроде знакомый, но почему-то вылетело из головы когда писал. Спасибо.